10-23-2004, 06:29 AM
I wrote these on the floor of a mens room. real powerful, it was after a recent break up of mine, and i happened to come across the same mens room so i wrote them down on paper (instead of the floor). here they are (whatever):
He gave in again
the bastard
can't keep refusing to te__ll
He sat in his grave
shallow and light
screaming, it felt like he___ll
so
to carry on
in sweet silence
never to, believe
never to help with
recovering
distressed, belongings
and
touch
my eyelids fall victim
to
paralization
and
all i can do__ is
drown
in this torrent of
sweet silent
surrender will
overtake, my bleeding heart
the pain is
to much so
I begin, to fall apart
(end)
Granted it doesn't make much sense, but i hope to rework it into an actuall song where the lyrics actually have more meaning. basically, these aren't powerful lyrics, but they have the potential to be. so if there are any poets out there, please help me out.
He gave in again
the bastard
can't keep refusing to te__ll
He sat in his grave
shallow and light
screaming, it felt like he___ll
so
to carry on
in sweet silence
never to, believe
never to help with
recovering
distressed, belongings
and
touch
my eyelids fall victim
to
paralization
and
all i can do__ is
drown
in this torrent of
sweet silent
surrender will
overtake, my bleeding heart
the pain is
to much so
I begin, to fall apart
(end)
Granted it doesn't make much sense, but i hope to rework it into an actuall song where the lyrics actually have more meaning. basically, these aren't powerful lyrics, but they have the potential to be. so if there are any poets out there, please help me out.
the mind is a beautiful thing, use it and make the world a more beautiful place.