A story. One so magical . . . :P Concept Idea.

[TheAdventMaster]

and TheAdventMaster is waging some sort of war on Gay people...?

Where did that come from O_O? If I said something offensive towards homosexuals and/or happy people I'm sorry...

I sooooo didnt understand anything that just happened here. o_O

I just mentioned your name because you tend to tell me to look up the dictionary So I asked if I was using the word Ironic correctly.

[NovaProgramming]

so... Cha0s is ... Terra... and TheAdventMaster.... is trying... to get to gaia?


um...



As for some actually constructive critism, I would say that it has the potential for a great story.... if you expand a little bit. "Terra" and "Gaia" have both been overused in so many stories (and video games) that I've lost count... so, at least for me, that was kind of a turn off. The concept of a two places at war with a lone hero "saving the day" seems overdone. I don't know why, but I have a gut feeling that I've heard/read this story already. If you can make it unique and interesting, then maybe it could fly, but otherwise it seems like a hodgepodge of other stories I've read just sort-of slung together. But again, that's just my opinion, feel free to take from it what you will. Good luck if you attempt!

[whitetiger0990]

Fucking sicko. What kind of sick fuck even posts that kind of #*&$? Fucking christ.

I love how you dodge the filter to say "fuck" but not to say "shit", which is a lot less taboo.

*looks around thread* er. yeah. tub girls... the Internet is going to kill us all, I just know it.

So.. Gaia... The Greek god of Earth... verses Terra.. The Roman god of Earth.. And a kid named Zen... A school of Buddhism which asserts that enlightenment can be achieved through meditation... Yay for Holy War. =p

*backs out of thread slowly*

[Zap]

Whitetiger, there is no filter


On topic: "Gaia" and "Terra"... needs more imaginative powers :lol:

[whitetiger0990]

Whitetiger, there is no filter ;)

Really? Bah, oh well. He put the tags inbetween the letters so I assumed there was. Anyways, what I said still stands!


Why are they at war?

[TheAdventMaster]

@Sumojo:
Fuck. There's a filter over here... Personal settings?

Why are they at war?

Oh, basically the good old cheap power-hungry people really . . .

They were all originally from Gaia. They colonized out further eventually and now the people long seperated from their native land feel they are better and deserve more power, while the Gaians feel they should keep the power since they're so well-rounded. Of course, a lot of this was government propaganda to try and get the public itself thinking that they were above the other nation, and that the other nation thought little of them.

The main guys to worry about are those ruling the nations. This is a mixture of much fantasy and science fiction. While I originally had the idea of large use of artillery weapons, the really powerful guys are strong enough to use their spirit power in war.

So on one side you'll have huge tanks shooting out nuclear fusion blasts, and on the other side they might just be lucky enough to have a Chi Master who can manipulate that energy. Pretty fricken sweet IMO.

The concept of a two places at war with a lone hero "saving the day" seems overdone.

Oh no, there's no way he'd do it. I mean with any story, you have to try and imagine that all the characters are all sort of "main characters" of the story, but you focus on the one person who seems to do the most, while having some sort of future ahead of them.

He wouldn't stop the war on his own. He gets caught in it (probably gets kidnapped and has to take sides just to survive), and leaves the major fighting to the entire civiliations themselves.

The only way he'd get caught up and stop the war is if he confronted the leaders of the planets somehow and something ended up happening to them because of it.

^_^;;

So.. Gaia... The Greek god of Earth... verses Terra.. The Roman god of Earth.. And a kid named Zen... A school of Buddhism which asserts that enlightenment can be achieved through meditation... Yay for Holy War. =p

Lol. I had no idea It was originall Alexander, but I thought using my own name was lame.

@All:

Thanks for the input. I realize much of the story is kinda cheap, but it was just a concept. Don't expect any progress on it ^_^:; I'm far too busy and I probably shouldn't have started thinking of a new story idea so soon.

[KiZ]

Whitetiger, there is no filter ;)

yes there is:

fuck shit

[Zap]

yes there is:

:???: There is then, although I know I removed it... Oh well.

Edit: Talked with Sumo, now its off again, it was a misunderstanding.

[Mr Match]

not for me...I see all! :o


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[TheAdventMaster]

not for me...I see all! :o


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Because it was fixed?